The essay by Guan Jie on Question 1 analyzes the different factors that need to be considered and solved by developing country and developed country and compares what the two kinds of countries must to do to bring about an agreement.The essay discusses the situations of developing countries,especially China and India first and lists the problems and contradictions on their way for developing as well as limiting greenhouse gas emitting.Then it discusses what the developed countries should do.Finally it concludes that the cooperation in all the countries is the way to save the earth.
The essay’s structure is good and the various transition signals make it smooth to read.The content mainly contains sufficient analysises and discussion to answer the question.Expression of writer’s idea is clear and grammatical is accurate.The final conclusion also shows writer’s main idea simply and clearly.
One of the problems of this essay is that the thesis statement at the beginning of it is not very obvious and the first paragraph is too long.Another problem is that proofs as well as raletive data which can be used to support writer’s idea are not enough.Besides,the order of the discussion makes it like a essay list what the two kinds of countries should do respectly and cannot show the comparison between them.
Over all,it’s a perfect essay to express the unique idea of writer on what countries should do to save our planet.
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