This essay is about an integrated approach to combating global warming. In the introduction part, Haiyuan listed many bad results of global warming showing that the necessity of an integrated approach and indicated two reasons why an integrated approach must be come up with.
The first reason was that natural ecosystems control biogeochemical cycles. Haiyuan used many examples to show the power of natural ecosystem in fighting against global warming. These were good enough to support his view. The second reason was that natural habitats were the safest, easiest and cheapest way to deal with global warming. However, example used here was similar to examples which used in the first reason. I think Haiyuan should choose an example to explain why natural habitats were safe, easy and cheap way to reduce greenhouse gas.
The conclusion part emphasized that an integrated approach was necessary to fight against global warming.
This is a good essay. However, the whole essay did not include citation which is required when used outside information. If Haiyuan could choose more suitable examples to support his ideas, the essay would be much impressive.
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Thanks for Jieyang's wonderful comments.
ReplyDeleteHaving read my first draft, I do notice that I need more different examples for the second arguement of the author and I have did them in the final draft.
I forget to include citation when I was writing the first draft, and I worked on it in the final draft.
In a word, Jieyang's comment is very useful for me to work on my final draft. Thank you.
----Jiang Haiyuan
Above is POST 3!!!!
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