[Post 2] Comment by Hongchuan over Jieyang's Summary

The summary written by Jieyang is well-structured. He first gave an introduction about the meeting held in Copenhagen and he stated that the meeting was not a success. I also personally agree with him. As a matter of fact, the energy consumption to run this event is huge. The meeting was originated to solve global warming but ironically, it became a great source of carbon emission.

Jieyang's elaboration started with the fact that there are certain difficulties for the treaty/agreement to be established as developed countries and developing countries are just two completely different worlds, they will seek for their own good so the treaty cannot be agreed mutually and Jieyang also provided some solutions and approaches to solve this difficulties and he mentioned that responsibility is the key element for both developed and developing countries to solve this global issue.

Overall, his summary was not bad but there's still room for improvements. Hope he will do it well in final draft!

[Post 2] Comment by Jieyang over Haiyuan's Summary

This essay is about an integrated approach to combating global warming. In the introduction part, Haiyuan listed many bad results of global warming showing that the necessity of an integrated approach and indicated two reasons why an integrated approach must be come up with.
The first reason was that natural ecosystems control biogeochemical cycles. Haiyuan used many examples to show the power of natural ecosystem in fighting against global warming. These were good enough to support his view. The second reason was that natural habitats were the safest, easiest and cheapest way to deal with global warming. However, example used here was similar to examples which used in the first reason. I think Haiyuan should choose an example to explain why natural habitats were safe, easy and cheap way to reduce greenhouse gas.
The conclusion part emphasized that an integrated approach was necessary to fight against global warming.
This is a good essay. However, the whole essay did not include citation which is required when used outside information. If Haiyuan could choose more suitable examples to support his ideas, the essay would be much impressive.

[Post 2] Comment by Zheming over Guanjie's Summary

The essay by Guan Jie on Question 1 analyzes the different factors that need to be considered and solved by developing country and developed country and compares what the two kinds of countries must to do to bring about an agreement.The essay discusses the situations of developing countries,especially China and India first and lists the problems and contradictions on their way for developing as well as limiting greenhouse gas emitting.Then it discusses what the developed countries should do.Finally it concludes that the cooperation in all the countries is the way to save the earth.
The essay’s structure is good and the various transition signals make it smooth to read.The content mainly contains sufficient analysises and discussion to answer the question.Expression of writer’s idea is clear and grammatical is accurate.The final conclusion also shows writer’s main idea simply and clearly.
One of the problems of this essay is that the thesis statement at the beginning of it is not very obvious and the first paragraph is too long.Another problem is that proofs as well as raletive data which can be used to support writer’s idea are not enough.Besides,the order of the discussion makes it like a essay list what the two kinds of countries should do respectly and cannot show the comparison between them.
Over all,it’s a perfect essay to express the unique idea of writer on what countries should do to save our planet.

[Post 2] Comment by Haiyuan over Hongchuan's Summary

Firstly, this essay needs an introduction. Although the topic asks us to show the 2 arguments the author used to support his case, it is still a little bit strange for an essay to come without an introduction. Moreover, there should be a thesis statement along with the introduction to show the readers what is going to be talked about.

Secondly, Hongchuan caught exactly the 2 arguments which shown in the essay. Using a single paragraph for each argument, he uses the topic sentence in each paragraph, which makes this essay better structured and helps readers to follow him.

Thirdly, he added a lot of arguments in this essay to support the necessity of an integrated approach. This shows his wide range of knowledge. However, I think he needs to add some references along with these additional arguments. What’s more, like the tutor said, this essay is to show the 2 arguments used by the author in the essay “a force to fight global warming “rather than to talk about the importance of an integrated approach for the issue; so I think Hongchuan should emphasize more on the arguments given in the essay.

Generally speaking, Hongchuan’s essay is quite a good essay although there still needs some improvement. I believe the final draft will be an amazing essay.